I wish I had a pair of wings，Take me all over the world to see the beautiful Spring，Because spring is holy，I love Spring。 The sun is shining on my body，I looked at the fragrant flowers and green ng girl's footsteps have come to the earth，Small trees have leaves,I touch the skin of a tree。I listen to the footsteps of the spring rain，I planted the seeds of hope.，Spring has come。 I took the hand of spring girl, I hope my Chunkun winter just disappear, I hope my achievements, such as spring like, getting better and better, I hope my knowledge, such as the new grass, which grows higher, more and more rich.
I really hope that the spring will never stop, and I embrace life。 Now I don't say it. I want to feel the spring.
修改后：
I wish I had a pair of wings which can take me to see the beautiful spring around the world. Because spring is holy, I love spring.
In spring, the sun shines brightly, and the weather becomes warmer and warmer. The flowers begin to bloom, and the trees begin to turn green. So I can go outside to enjoy the sunshine and smell the flowers. Sometimes, it rains. We feel very comfortable.
In spring, farmers start to sow the seeds. And I am also ready tohave a new start. I am ready to work hard. I am ready to learn. I hope my knowledge, like the new grass, will be richer and richer.
修改老师：Crystal老师
六年级:管晓宇