Spring is my favorite season！In spring, the trees take out new shoots,grow pale green leaves . The grass on the playgroundalso sneak out of the head, on the playground on the east of the kapok tree is full of red flowers, like escaping the burning fire. Litchi and longan all over the tree flowers, attracted a lot of bees, the bees humming, with colorful flowers adorn the ng, the willow branches in the breeze and rain in the sky of the dye to the green, green bud quietly covered with willow ng breeze blow the willow branches open, gently a shake a put, it is like a barber, with an enormous comb and scissors for the little girl's hair. Ah, spring! You decorate the earth with a rainbow of colors; Your tender caress has given rise to all things; You smell fresh brought to life. I love you, the beautiful spring!
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Spring is my favorite season！In spring, the trees put out new shoots,grow pale green leaves . The grass on the groundalso made a bud, kapok tree is full of red flowers, like the burning flowers on the treeattract a lot of bees are humming around from flower to ng, the willow branches in the breeze and rain in the sky of the dye to the green, green bud quietly covered with willow ng breeze blow the willow branches open, gently a shake a put, it is like a barber, with an enormous comb and scissors for the little girl's hair. Ah, spring! You decorate the earth with a rainbow of colors; Your tender cares has given rise to all things; You make life alive . I love you, the beautiful spring!
修改老师：Crystal 老师
六年级:何莹莹