I've always been upset,for the stress I feel often makes me a beautiful afternoon,I was keeping on writing to fight for my dream.'There is only a little time left and I must be hard-working enough to attend the high school I've dreamed of.'I I felt so tired that I almost wanted to give it enly,a ray of the sun went through the window and directly kissed my warm the feeling was!I couldn't help walking towards the window and looked out of the sky was blueas ifit's been d seemed to be free and have fun with each how,I wanted to listen to music and turned on my MP3 player.I felt like I was lost in paradise while the wind in spring that is not too strong was touching me I covered my eyes whichwas dry all I realized that it wasspring now.I took a deep breath believing that there must be something active in the air.'Spring is hugging me!'I shouted out with thing real moved me a lot so that I went back to my mindcontinued telling me that you were the spring,boy.I've never been sad since onsearching for the meaning of life.I haven't found the answer ver,I have been understanding the importance of holding fast to my common saying goes,'Where there is a will, there is a way.'Perhaps in the future,I'll achieve my goal and hug my spring again.
修改后：
I've always been upset, for the stress I feel often makes me depressive. On a beautiful afternoon, I was keeping on working hard to fight for my dream. 'There is only little time left and I must study hard to improve myself, then I can go the high school I've dreamed of.' I thought. But I felt so tired that I almost gave it up. Suddenly, a ray of the sunshine went through the window and directly shoneon my face. How warm it was! I couldn't help walking towards the window and looked out of it. The sky was blue and clean as ifit's been washed. Clouds seemed to be free and have fun with each other. At that moment, I wanted to listen to some music and then I turned on my MP3 player. I felt like I was lost in paradise where the wind was touching me gently and softly. So I closed my eyes. Soon I realized that it wasspring now. I took a deep breath to enjoy the fresh air. 'Spring is hugging me!' I shouted out happily. Something really moved me a lot. Then I went back to my chair. My mindcontinued telling me that the spring has come, it was time for starting and keeping on going with your dream. As common saying goes, 'Where there is a will, there is a way.' In the future, I'll achieve my goal and hug the spring once again.
修改老师：Crystal 老师
初三:李章潮